MarkL15
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control
and it flows,
taking away all the pain and the grief,
letting you start to understand, to believe,
harsh reality as red runs on pale soft skin
start to wonder where it is you end and begin,
and it leaves
takes away all the hatred and anger you feel inside,
stops you becoming numb to everything around,
and you wake up to the dark world your living in,
with each fading bruise and fresh cut on pale skin,
and it releases
for awhile your alright, your the one in control,
if anyone was to hurt you, then let it be you,
and the feeling of being lost, is no longer felt
as you know that you have done this to yourself
and it makes it ok
to be who you are for just another endless day,
to feel the pain that someone can cause in many ways,
but you know that why you hold that control, you'll be ok
and when that endless night passes, another day your ready to face.
Last edited by MarkL15, 11/29/2003, 7:13 am
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And I don't want the world to see me
'Cause I don't think that they'd understand
When everything's made to be broken
I just want you to know who I am
Goo Goo Dolls - iris
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11/29/2003, 7:11 am
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Cutie T
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WOW... Nice poem Mark VERY nice... it kinda struck a cord in me made me thinbk about things i used to feel(when joshy died.. and the Eric episodes of drama in my life) but it was a very good poem Mark i really liked it.
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Your not my god,
your not my friend,
your not the ones that i will walk with in the end,
Your not the truth,
your a temporary shot,
and you Ruin peoples' lives and you don't give a second thought
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11/29/2003, 11:12 am
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Laurie1981
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This was very powerful, i have read all your poems and this one struck the most. Seeing as i don't have time to review all of them I will just review this one. Very well written, could feel the emotion in each word and the flow of the words just makes this a brilliant poem even though the subject is a darker area. Very good poem Mark.
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12/5/2003, 10:12 am
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mark i told you once that this poem spoke to me but tonight it seems to call out to me it fits in my world right now (witch i know is not really a good thing ) but i love this poem it has perfect words and feelings behind it can really relate to it
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I take photographs to hold onto time
I write to capture the feelings of each momment before it dies
I am me for the choices I make each and everyday
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3/23/2004, 5:26 am
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