wanderingsoul
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Re: My writing .. er .. things
Your poems are always a pleasure to read--even if they hit at feelings that are not at all pleasant. You express things so well. You have a talent for poetry that can only grow.
I would comment on each one, but that would take pages and pages and pages--your poems inspire me to many words (RUN! NO! Not MORE words from me!) But I will spare the world and just comment on one that touches my head right now: I Wish I Could
I think this one speaks to everyone who has ever loved or "liked" someone. On one hand, we REALLY want them to know how we feel, want them to look at us and say "I love you too." On the other hand, we are so afraid that if we say that they will not feel the same and it will destroy whatever relationship we already have with them. SO... do we live with the "what if's" or do we take a chance on the "shouldn't have's"? We have a friend. We are safe in that relationship. Do we risk losing that for the chance of making that relationship into something more?
Erin, this one hits so close to home, which is why I chose this one to comment on. So, is 1/2 a loaf better than no bread? No, not really. Took me 6 years to take the risk of losing a friend. I'm glad I finally came to my senses.
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And by and by my Soul returned to me, And answered "I Myself amd Heav'n and Hell"
from The Rubaiyat of Omar Khayyam as translated by Edward Fitzgerald
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9/8/2003, 4:00 pm
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Riley
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Well I finally got something out of this and I'm actually quite suprised at myself, not sure why though. Well here it is..
In My Heart They Stay
For the first time in weeks
I have shed a tear
Mourning the loss
Of a friend that was very dear
He wasn't even living
For this weeping I think of as odd
But the presance of him still touched my heart
Even more than I thought
In these events
I have lost something else
A dear friend, a great buddy
Who was hidden beneath his depths
She remains today as a simple aquaintance
But I have lost all we had once
Our friendship, past and closeness
Have faded with these past few months
It burdens me greathly, weighing down on my very shoulders
Of the losses that have affected me
But still, in my heart they stay
I shall never forget them and their company
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Bound at every limb by my shackles of fear/Sealed with lies through so many tears/Lost from within, pursuing the end/I fight for the chance to be lied to again - Lies - Evanescence
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